Friday, June 14, 2013

FFF Prompt - Apartment #6


Flash Fiction Challenge from Advizor54 Word Limit - 369 - I came in at 368!
Required Phrase - Bewildered
Forbidden Words - Knock, Lock(ed), Super
Extra Credit - Set the story during mid-day.
Bonus Words -
Tell us how she got the slipper (25 words)
Tell us about the neighborhood (25 words)

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She materialized inside the apartment complex, hiding her nature behind an illusion of humanity. As she made her way down the hall, her claws caught and tore the frayed carpet. With a glance at her feet, she growled in frustration and grabbed a pair of slippers from a shoe rack outside a nearby apartment. New to forays into the human world, she had yet to perfect the transformation into this form . Inevitably something forgot to change. This time, it was her feet. Slipping the paw-like appendages into her stolen shoes, she moved down the hall and towards apartment number six.

A few tentative raps summoned the one within, and a hungry smile curved her lips as he approached. Her wings threatened to burst free when the pure, healthy scent of the male resident assaulted her nose. An eye appeared in the viewer and she offered her best smile.

“I’ve gotten lost, sir. Could you show me where I am on this map?” Polite and helpful to a fault, the doomed man agreed. When the door swung into the apartment, she slipped inside before he could protest. “Such a delicious specimen,” she purred as the deadbolt clicked shut on its own.

“Y-y-y-you’re naked!” The man stammered, backing away as she stalked forward. His knees hit the sofa, and he fell onto the cushions with a whoof. She leapt onto his lap and licked his neck.

“So are you.” And he was. Magic was such a beautiful thing. It changed her form, removed clothing, and ensured her prey could not escape.

Kneeling between his legs, she captured his virgin cock in her mouth. He protested through grunts and moans of pleasure, but hardened almost instantly. He recited prayers as she straddled his lap, but met her every thrust. He begged forgiveness from his God, but took His name in vain as he filled her clutching pussy with his come. She took him many times that night, draining his life-force as she fucked him raw. His prayers lessened with each orgasm until he ceased reciting them entirely.


The succubus left at midnight, leaving her prey’s shriveled, naked husk on the sofa with a sated but bewildered smile on his face.

10 comments:

  1. OMGOSH I LOVE IT!!!! (and I got a little hard in the reading.)

    A million thanks to Word Wytch for pulling you in to our little circle of writers. I love seeing a unique take. "He begged forgiveness from his God, but took His name in vain." A terrific line that will stay with me for a long time.

    THANKS!

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    1. Thanks! I just finished a huge project so finally had the time to participate. Glad you enjoyed it.

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  2. Huzzah! I'm so glad you played! This was a great take. Knowing your other works, I could see this being a sideline. :)

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    1. Thank you :) It just might. I haven't played with a succubus until now.

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  3. Oh, I quite loved the darkened mythic quality of this. What a way to die, as well! Excellently done, and so glad lovely Word enticed you!

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    1. Thank you! :) I pretty much give everything a paranormal bend to it, so it was just deciding who was the critter and who was the human and what kind of critter to choose. lol

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  4. Wow.. I marvel at all the interesting creatures this naked lady has brought forth! Great take! Fun FFFing with you! -Sassy

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    1. lol thank you! I will have to participate again :)

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  5. It's kind of like Cat People meets Species - I love it! Or maybe a really sexy "I Come in Peace" where the alien sucks your love juice instead of your endorphins.

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    1. I've yet to really play around with a succubus, so I thought this was the perfect opportunity. She may well resurface again lol

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